I really enjoyed the tension before the 'birth' as it's a really tactile and uncomfortable build up mimicking the narrator's internal pressure; and then the final release is so welcome after all the build up (I loved the list, it prolonged the relief) so much so that the next step is extra traumatic.
You absolute maniac—this was glorious. I came in expecting a piss joke and left with a full-blown cinematic odyssey.
“Accidental suicide by piss” and “seppuku with a turkey syringe” are staying with me forever. It’s disgusting. It’s deranged. It’s weirdly beautiful.
You took a premise no one should pull off and somehow made it feel like gospel.
Bravo!
Wow that was sooooo great!
Thank you David!
Horrifying.
I really enjoyed the tension before the 'birth' as it's a really tactile and uncomfortable build up mimicking the narrator's internal pressure; and then the final release is so welcome after all the build up (I loved the list, it prolonged the relief) so much so that the next step is extra traumatic.
It made me actually panic sweat.
I'm looking forward to you posting more stuff!
Damn, never thought I’d be happy to hear that I made someone “panic sweat”!
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this, Matt. I really appreciate it.